PowerPoint Mentality
He is the presenter
His project: a PowerPoint presentation.
He has flashcards with nothing written down
Slides with titles and no content.
His transitions are elaborate, the colors are captivating.
Yet his presentation lacks meaning, thought, care.
He has the skills to grab your attention
But you absorb nothing
He offers nothing.
He has great plans and no presentation.
If it were an interview perhaps his slides would not be so bare
But then again, is this not his job on the line?
A meeting where he is the presenter
With a blank PowerPoint presentation.
His project: a PowerPoint presentation.
He has flashcards with nothing written down
Slides with titles and no content.
His transitions are elaborate, the colors are captivating.
Yet his presentation lacks meaning, thought, care.
He has the skills to grab your attention
But you absorb nothing
He offers nothing.
He has great plans and no presentation.
If it were an interview perhaps his slides would not be so bare
But then again, is this not his job on the line?
A meeting where he is the presenter
With a blank PowerPoint presentation.
Hi Honey, this feels to me like the beginning of a longer funny narrative poem in which the metaphor becomes a funny inter-gender spoof on a less than brilliant gentlemen with a dry personality. It seems to me that this poem will succeed to the extent that it makes readers smile, and I think being a little more dramatic and inventive would do the trick. If you decide to keep and work on this poem some more, I would try to improvise funny ideas for using the PowerPoint metaphor to poke fun at the person, and don't be afraid of your humor becoming little more wicked. That's usually a good thing in poetry!
ReplyDeleteI like the repetition of words in this poem with "nothing" and "presentation" because it solidifies your point so well. And the first sentence is great; it's so direct and it immediately introduces the reader to the main subject. The part that confused me was the line "But then again, is this not his job on the line?" I'm trying to understand what it means exactly for the "presenter" since he does not have a job.
ReplyDeleteI think it might be cleared up if I'd made this longer and gone into more detail and added to the metaphor. He's making a pitch and either he will be successful or he will fail. It's not a job in the strict sense of the word, rather his next "assignment" where he works. He's meant to be making a successful pitch but his presentation is heavily lacking content.
DeleteI really like the idea of this, but I think it needs to be longer with more context. It's super mysterious which is awesome, but it's also a bit confusing because I can't tell what the speaker's role is in the narrative vs. who the man is that the speaker is referring to. I think the only thing missing is a better understanding of the characters and their relationship to each other.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback! I agree, if it were longer and had more context it would probably fill in the gaps of the characters' relationships and roles.
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